Section Nine

 

But what about ME?!  I’M beautiful!  AND I’m half-demon!  Mary’s nothing but half-cat!

 

Scary Sues/Hairy Stus

 

Total Points: 6900

 

Now, we ask you to take a little break from specifically scoring your beloved character, and switch gears to your fanon characters.  Particularly those fanon characters that are (DUN DUN DUN) evil.  The characters that we have termed Scary Sues and Hairy Stus.

Their nature is faux sinister.  All in all, they are just as awful as their siblings, Gary and Mary.  Meaning they are unrealistic, flat, and ANNOYING.  They are Mary Sues’ opposite numbers—Mary Sues aspire for good, while Scary Sues are BAD.  But they are rarely the main villain—their purpose is strictly to bring misery to a Mary Sue.  They’re spiteful and obsessive; they are the rejected Mary Sues and they KNOW IT.  They’re mean.  They’re nasty.  And they hate everything to do with Christmas.

And this doesn’t sound like a good character, does it?  No.  They’re horrible.  They’re STUPID.  YES, everyone hates them, but not for the reasons the author wants them to.  And, amazingly enough, the author often despises the Scary Sue more than her own character hates her.   For a full description of these unusual outgrowths from the Mary Sue in literature, see our essay on the subject here.

Essentially, what it all boils down to is that Scary Sue is a Mary Sue author’s attempt to create a foil for her character.  The result is that flat, mangled, and petty creature, the Scary Sue.  And when any two Sues meet in the same universe—LOOK OUT!!  Sparks are inevitably gonna fly, ‘cause THERE CAN BE ONLY ONE!!!!

So take a good long look at your EEEEEEEEEVIL characters and score them here.  Remember:  Do not add this section to your composite score for the main character of interest—this is a special section devoted entirely to the Scary Sue—in the scoring section, there is a bonus that will be added to your score should you find that you have created a Scary Sue, because they are rarely found without their nicer sister Mary.

 

1.            Is there a canon/original character who is based on someone who, in reality, you hate who is the enemy of your main character? (+1000)

 

Okay, you can stop now.  Your character’s a Scary Sue.

 

2.          Is there a canon/original character who is the archenemy of your main character? (+50)

            Bonus:   +50 if the nemesis is the same sex as your character

                        +100 if the nemesis has a Sue-ish name as outlined in Section One (these are usually “dark” versions of said names, e.g. Mary Sue—Crimson Rose Lightwind.  Scary Sue—Ravyn Darkfire)

 

This is not a terrible mistake to make in a fic, but you should probably just watch it, as many Sue authors love to use this device.  It is quite normal for a person to have someone that they really just don’t like, and it happens most often that said person is a member of the same sex of that person.  This just need to be noted here as it is often a Mary Sue plot device that can lead to a Scary Sue.  And having one of those ridiculous Sue-ish names is always a bad sign in any character.

 

3.          Is part of the animosity between the two characters in part due to the Gryffindor/Slytherin rivalry (+50), are they in different houses but two without such a traditionally strong rivalry (+50), or are they in the same House (+100)?

 

Having a Gryffindor and a Slytherin hate each other is quite acceptable—look at Hermione and Pansy Parkinson.  Just don’t copy off of the Harry/Malfoy dichotomy—Sue authors tend to do this.  And as it hasn’t been established what the other Houses think of each other, it is also acceptable to have members of Houses other than Gryffindor and Slytherin hate each other.  Unfortunately, this is a way that some Sue authors attempt to disguise the fact that they are indeed just copying off of the Harry/Malfoy rivalry.  And as for having the archenemy be in the same House—that’s just silly.  People are Sorted according to personality and choices—it is highly doubtful that any two people who have absolutely nothing in common would end up in the same House. 

 

4.          Is the archenemy attractive? (+50)

 

This is nothing special—many people believe that Malfoy is much more attractive than Harry.  It’s just that, as with a Mary Sue, a Scary Sue often has just one-too-many “good” traits that add up to a flat character.

 

5.          Is the archenemy rich? (+50)

 

Again, nothing too special.  If the enemy is a pureblood bigot like Malfoy, chances are she’ll be rather well off.  Just watch out about giving any character too many traits that we ourselves would like to have.

 

6.          Is the archenemy talented? (+50)

 

As before—don’t make the character good at everything.  Scary Sues share many similar qualities to Mary Sues in this regard.  Not to mention the fact that Scary Sues often use said talents to cause mischief.

 

7.          Is the arch nemesis arrogant, conceited, snobby, and/or shallow? (+100)

 

This one is a classic Scary Sue—in an effort to show the readers how icky that character is, Sue authors lump about fifteen petty, irritating character flaws into one character, so that their main character is a shining paragon of virtue compared to the Scary Sue.  Plus, it also makes for a Draco Malfoy knock-off and a repeat of Question #2 plagiarism.

 

8.          Is the arch nemesis pureblood? (+50)

 

Yet another Draco Malfoy knockoff.  Yes, if your nemesis is a Slytherin, it’s highly probable that she’s a pureblood.  We’ve only heard of two Slytherin half-bloods, and they are about as Slytherin as you could possibly get.  But the character is not Draco Malfoy.  Don’t make her just like him.

 

9.          Is the arch nemesis prejudiced against Muggles or Muggleborns? (+50)

 

Same as before, only now the nemesis’s prejudices oftentimes give your character a chance to throw a Sue-ly self-righteous fit.  It’s old.  It’s used.  And it is irritating.

 

10.      Does the arch nemesis have neglectful or abusive parents? (+50)

 

Here’s a way to blame your character’s evil behavior on her troubled childhood.  WEAK.  That is pure nonsense in ALL worlds.  Not only that, but this paves the way for the Scary Sue to see the error of her ways and become a groupie for your main character—which is just bad.

 

11.       Is the arch nemesis rather gullible/unintelligent? (+100)

            Bonus:   +200 if she always falls for the jokes/pranks the main character plays on her

 

This just isn’t very nice.  Sue authors oftentimes make their nemeses very stupid to make their character seem smarter, when, in reality, she’s not—they’re both equally dumb.  And no one always falls for jokes or pranks.  I mean, honestly, if you know someone hates you, are you just going to take the candy they grinningly offer you without wondering if something is amiss?  NO!

 

12.      Does the arch nemesis have a group of friends just like him/her? (+50)

 

Mary Sue groupies, Scary Sue groupies.  Same thing.  Only the Scary Sue groupies allow dearest Mary to have more suffering and constant torment to be strong about.  Yes, everyone has friends.  It’s okay to give your enemy some fanon friends.  BUT NOT MORE SCARY SUES!!

 

13.      Does the arch nemesis have very few or no friends whatsoever? (+100)

 

And this is just mean.  Not EVERYONE is going to hate the arch nemesis.  There are going to be people who like her.  Using Draco Malfoy as an example—he has friends, and he’s a bigoted little turd.  So don’t make the arch nemesis so evil she’s completely friendless.

 

14.      Does your archenemy have any of the relatively mundane abilities mentioned in Section Six of the Mary Sue test? (+200)

 

Look, if you hate your character so much, why rail on about all the great stuff she can do?  It’s just silly.  And it’s one of those traits that Scary Sues and Mary Sues both have in common.  We really don’t care, okay?  No one does.

 

15.      Does your archenemy have any of the unearthly abilities as outlined in Section Seven of the Mary Sue test? (+500)

 

Talk about War of the Sues!  This is a total NIGHTMARE.  No one really wants to hear about your epic battle of gorgeous and noble half-Angel Saffire Serenity Lupin versus selfish and darkly beautiful half-Balrog Onyx Shadowcat.  It’s boring and highly Sue-ish, meaning it’s UNREALISTIC and has no place in J.K.’s universe.

 

16.      Does the archenemy hate your character for no reason whatsoever? (+200)

 

Dumb!  Granted, some people can irritate others for no reason, but they don’t form a lasting vendetta with absolutely no basis!  It doesn’t happen.  We’re not about to go around hating people for no reason—with the glaring exception of Mary Sues.  EVERYTHING has a reason, okay?  This is just a Sue author problem of not having time to explain WHY, because they have to get back to their GREAT character and how she’s holding up under the stress of dearest Scary.

 

17.      Does the archenemy hate the main character because he/she is jealous of her? (+100)

            Bonus:   +100 if she’s jealous of the main character’s romantic relationship with another character and/or lusts after her significant other

 

This one is even more done then the previous, even though it is much more plausible.  It is the single biggest earmark of a Scary Sue.  As stated, Scary is a reject Mary.  If Mary wasn’t around, Scary would probably be the total center of attention with everyone loving her and such sugar as that.  However, she’s not and she hates it.  And having them jealous of Mary’s love life is even bigger.  Since, of course, Mary gets all the best guys and Scary is left with her sloppy and drooling seconds, she’s gonna get jealous and want the best, too.  Just don’t, okay?  Don’t.

 

18.      Do all the canon characters and/or friends of your character hate the arch nemesis? (+100)

            Bonus:   +200 if she’s never actually done anything to the canon characters/friends, but they hate her anyway because she hates your character

 

It’s one thing to have your arch nemesis be hated by your character.  It’s quite another for the whole world to be on the same side as your character, banding together to thwart the evil person who dares not like her.  It doesn’t work that way, particularly if the arch nemesis’s only offense is to not like the way your character eats peas!  Essentially, this is just again showing how evil the nemesis is and how great your character is, which is just stupid.

 

19.      Does the archenemy do everything in his/her power to torment/destroy the main character? (+50)

            Bonus:   +100 if the enemy’s cruelties are merely petty and spiteful

 

Oooooold!  It makes your readers go to sleep it’s so used.  There’s only one person who goes around trying to destroy his arch nemesis—that’s Voldemort.  And even he has other things to think about, like gaining lots of power and being deliciously evil.  Don’t create a character who does ABSOLUTELY NOTHING but plot against your character.  No one does this.  It’s ridiculous.  Everyone has a life in some capacity—except for a Scary Sue.  And petty and spiteful cruelties are so stupid and annoying we care not to discuss them in full detail, as it is obvious why you shouldn’t do this. 

 

20.    Is the archenemy the main villain in your fic? (+100)

 

This one can go either way.  Some people place a fic before Harry’s time, or it’s simply a small slice of the HP universe that doesn’t involve Harry, which is a common device that is actually used to avoid Sues sometimes.  In this case, having a fanon villain is quite acceptable.  It’s just that with Sues, said villain is often a Scary Sue. 

And needless to say, Voldemort is a big bad guy.  In point of fact, one gets the impression that in the Harry Potter universe, he is Satan himself.  If your fic does center around Harry, but the main villain is that dangerously beautiful new girl that showed up and is now pettily tormenting your character AND Harry…no.

 

21.      Does your character often have instances where she saves the nemesis’s life? (+50)

            Bonus:   +100 if it’s a situation the nemesis planned to try and get at your character gone wrong that endangers the nemesis herself

                        +100 if it’s a situation the nemesis got herself into because she was foolish/stupid/showing off

 

This is just painful, all of it.  If there’s one Sue trait that drives every sane reader up the wall, it’s having her watch her bravely put herself in danger for the sake of her enemies.  How sappy can you get?  And it’s even worse if it’s a backfired plot of Scary, or the Scary just being an idiot, like trying to be greater than Mary by attempting to tame a Basilisk.  That’s just a double whammy, showing how dumb and evil Scary is and how noble and selfless little Mary is.  Avoid this at all costs.

 

22.    Is your character kind and pitying to the arch nemesis despite her constant cruelty? (+100)

 

This makes everyone want to cry, in the sense that it hurts so much.  How many people do you know who are genuinely kind and caring to someone who makes them royally cheesed off?  We can bet you don’t know any of them.  We know a few, but not personally:  Mother Teresa, St. Francis, etc.  YOUR character does NOT fall into that category.  Don’t practically canonize your character to make her seem grand and noble and selfless and pure of heart. 

 

23.    Does your character somehow sacrifice herself for the arch nemesis? (+200)

 

Blar, okay?  Just blar.  This is revolting.  I truly doubt that anyone’s sense of duty towards an enemy is going to overwhelm their sense of self-preservation, an instinct that overrides nearly all others in times of extreme danger.  DON’T.

 

24.    Does the arch nemesis collaborate with Voldemort? (+50)

            Bonus:   +100 if she does this solely to get at her enemy, rather than agreeing with Voldemort’s ideals

                        +200 if it has absolutely nothing to do with Voldemort’s current plans, and he just goes along with it

 

The first one isn’t quite so terrible.  While it does overemphasize how evil Scary is, it also is a legitimate device for a pureblood, anti-Muggle Slytherin type.  But it is NOT a legitimate device for someone who does NOT believe in these things.  They are not going to go traipsing off to join the most evil wizard in the world just to get at your character.  And do you really think Voldemort is going to drop every plan he has working at the moment just to serve Scary?  No, he’s not.  He’d probably kill her for her presumptuousness, as we would ALL love to do.

 

25.    Does the arch nemesis not need to collaborate with Voldemort, because she’s ten times more evil and powerful in Dark Magic or abilities? (+500)

 

Sigh.  Bad.  That’s really bad.  While you can have lesser villains in different situations, there is ONE MAIN VILLAIN in the HP universe.  NO ONE is as nasty as this guy, okay?  We’ve already stated that it seems he is the equivalent of the Devil in the HP universe.  And who do you know who’s more evil than the Devil? 

 

26.    Does she de-throne Voldemort? (+500)

 

And once again, who do you know who can go down to Hell and unseat Lucifer?  It’s not going to happen, except maybe in twisted worlds like South Park.  Which we don’t live in, and neither does Harry Potter. 

 

27.    Does the arch nemesis sleep around? (+100)

 

Here’s another way to make Scary seem so evil and unpleasant while her sister Mary is put on a pedestal to exemplify purity with her shining white soul.  Don’t make an enemy a ho, okay, just to make your character seem better.  It’s annoying, and makes everyone sick. 

 

28.    Does the arch nemesis often try to break apart the relationships of the main character? (+100)

 

Scary Sues do this way too often for comfort.  It’s their main device that they use to attempt to destroy Mary.  Don’t use this.  Use something else.  If anything, it’s so overused it’s sickening.

 

29.    Does the arch nemesis try to seduce the main character’s significant other? (+100)

 

This ties into the jealousy issue, as well as the above question.  Scary wants attention from all the best people.  And she doesn’t get it.  Moreover, she wants whatever MARY’S got.  And moreover again, she never gets it. 

 

30.    Does the arch nemesis try to seduce the main character? (+200)

 

This, obviously, most often happens with a nemesis of the opposite sex, though it can happen with same sex.  This is generally a device used by that such nemesis to break up relationships as stated previously and is, as such, poo-pooed. 

 

31.      Does your character reform any of the arch nemesis’s evil friends? (+100)

 

As a rule, avoid that old “reforming the bad guys” bit.  Old, trite, and disgusting.

 

32.    Does your character reform the arch nemesis? (+200)

 

This one’s even worse.  Don’t do it.  Either of them.

 

33.    Do you, as the author, hate the arch nemesis just as much as, if not more so, than your main character does? (+200)

            Bonus:   +100 if all your reviewers share your sentiments

 

Here’s the big one.  Mary Sue authors HATE Scary Sues, because, more often than not, Scary Sues are Mary’s harshest critic and usually point out all that is wrong with them.  And we all know how Mary Sue authors bow up when somebody picks on their character—including other fanon characters.  And, since fellow Mary Sue-ers are the only ones who read this drivel, they all hate her, too.  However, that may not be necessarily true.  While it probably is, you could have just written a really despicable bad guy, i.e., Umbridge.  It’s possible, but watch it.  If this is the case, chances are, she’s a Scary Sue.

 

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