Section Eight

 

Oh, Mary, you’re so GREAT!  We wanna be JUST LIKE YOU—and we ARE!!

 

Fanon Characters

 

Total Points:  4900

 

When an author forges into the world of fanfic, they are very lucky in that the world in which they are playing is rich, well established, and peopled with a host of colorful characters.  However, one can, at times, only do so much with what is available, and so it is up to them to create a few new characters of their own, besides their main creation.  This is perfectly legal, even acceptable, especially if your main character is not always a part of the action that J.K. has written.

However, Mary Sue authors even manage to pervert this acceptable device.  Since they just LOVE their character, think she is sooooo cool and the greatest thing since peanut butter and jelly, they decide to create ten more JUST LIKE HER!!!  (Although, of course, none of them will actually surpass their main character in anything—just everyone else.)

Talk about pain.  This is just too much.  So go through the following questions—it might, at times, even be necessary for you to run a relatively minor character through the wringer and tally up his/her points—there will be a special section in scoring devoted to minor characters.  One Sue is bad enough.  Please don’t torture us with more.

 

1.             Does your character have any siblings? (+25)

            Bonus:   +25 if the character is the only girl in a large family of boys or vice versa

 

Siblings aren’t so bad.  A lot of folks have them.  They sometimes just kinda happen.  It’s normal.  It’s natural.  And quite acceptable.  Slightly LESS normal, but still quite feasible, is a family full of one sex and only one of the other.  Look at Ginny Weasley.  However, this is also a common device used to call attention to—you guessed it—how unique and special your character is.  Be careful.

 

2.           Does your character have a twin? (+25)

            Bonus:   +50 if they are fraternal twins of the same sex

                        +100 if they are fraternal twins of the opposite sex (in both cases, “fraternal” means they don’t look alike)

                        +100 if the twin is evil

 

Again.  Twins, in our opinion, are cool.  They are also, as stated before, normal, natural, and HAPPEN—although they are not as normal as the regular kind.  But, you may have noticed, most twins look alike.  Not always, although usually if they don’t, they’re boy/girl.  Unfortunately, having a set of twins who don’t look alike is a double-whammy of startling uniqueness in your character and also an often-used Mary Sue point.  And having an evil twin is no good, as what you wind up with is usually a cliché, an Evil Mary Sue, and/or a Scary Sue.  So, if your character IS a person with an evil twin, you are advised to keep that in mind and take your character’s sibling to Section Nine immediately.

 

3.          Are your character’s siblings based on your actual siblings or the sibling that you’ve always wanted? (+1000)

 

Well, it’s a Fanon Sue/Stu.  No other way to put it.  They’re simply insertions, and we’ve discussed how bad those are.  As much as we all want to, we cannot play in the HP universe—it’s fictional. 

 

4.          Do any of your character’s siblings score above 5000 points if a major character or 1000 points if a minor character when run through this test? (+100)

            Bonus:   +200 if all of them do

 

This happens a lot.  You write one Sue, you write another.  And, oddly enough, while Mary Sue invariably gets along just swimmingly with all the canon characters, she is highly territorial and very rarely gets along with a member of her own species—meaning, another Sue.  You will almost always wind up with a war in your fic, or if not that, you’ll wind up with something even worse—a NAUSEATINGLY CLOYING dissertation on “how wonderful it is to be sisters,” and “how we’re never jealous of each other because we’re BOTH OH-SO GREAT.”  When two Sues are in the same fic and they don’t fight, it’s disgusting.  At least keep it to one, if you must.

 

5.          If your character’s parents are both alive, are they very lenient, always telling your character how wonderful he/she is, overprotective, and/or never yell at your character? (+100)

 

If your character’s parents act like this, they are not very good parents.  If they’re lenient, it is a convenient nod for your character to do whatever the hell she wants.  That makes her a brat.  Also, if they always tell her how wonderful she is and how she’s so great and just the best child ever, she’s STILL going to be a brat.  When the parents are overprotective, that lets your character whine and wail about how they never let her do anything and how they won’t leave her alone blah blah blah.  It gets old.  If they never yell at her, that usually sets us up for your character to be endlessly naïve and become hurt if someone yells at her, which irritates readers.  People yell all the time, and we’ve discussed that naïve = stupid in the fanfiction world.  Make your parents realistic—and good parents know when to punish and praise their children.

 

6.          Are your character’s parents based off of your parents or the parents that you’ve always wanted? (+1000)

 

See Question #3.

 

7.          Do your character’s parents score above 5000 points if a major character, 1000 points if a minor character when run through this test? (+200)

 

Urgh.  NO ONE wants to read about a whole FAMILY of Mary Sues.  It’s cloying, bubbly, and ridiculously unrealistic.  Remember—EVERYONE in the fic needs to be realistic.  Even the minor characters.

 

8.          Does your character have a whole group of friends who are not canon characters? (+25)

            Bonus:   +50 if one of them is in a different House than the others

                        +100 if they are all in different Houses

                        +150 if some or all of them are adults (and your character is a student)

                        +150 if there is a significant age difference among the friends and your character

                        +200 if these characters constantly praise your character for her wit, cunning, abilities, ideas, etc.

 

There’s nothing wrong with creating some fanon characters for your character to play with.  Especially not with all this space that has to be populated.  If you’re not part of the main action of the story (Harry), then you have to make your own action.  And if you are not comfortable writing the canon characters’ personalities, and you feel you make them too OOC at the moment, experiment with fanon characters first.  Writing complex personalities, such as Harry or Snape, is hard.  It takes a while to perfect them.  However, don’t cross the line into Sue-dom.  You may wind up creating nothing more than a collection of groupies for your character.  Yes, you can be friends with people of another house, i.e. Luna Lovegood.  We applaud you if it’s a Gryffindor and Slytherin, in the sense that you are trying to say, “Not all Slytherins are bad,” because that is a very common Mary Sue stereotype.  However, don’t turn it into a sappy, gooshy love fest, where they all sit in a circle and sing Kumbaya.  If anything else, the houses simply do not mix all at once.  An individual basis can work; all together will NOT.  You have seen Quidditch matches.  And you’ve seen the DA—most students paired with members of their own House.  That rivalry is not gonna fade any time soon.  And you also may set up your character giving little speeches, horribly sappy speeches, about how we can all still be friends, and “why can’t we all just get along.” 

And age difference doesn’t work very often at the ages of the students in Hogwarts.  Seventh years do not cavort with first years.  All the classes have their own problems to deal with.  Plus, how many seventeen year olds hang around with eleven year olds?  And we have no idea why a fifth year would be willing to put aside O.W.L.S. for a twelve year old.  It’s nonsensical.  Don’t try it if you are a first time writer. And having fanon characters all slobbering after your character because she’s so SMART, and WITTY, and POWERFUL, and SPECIAL, and UNIQUE is instant Sue sign.  That’s what YOU think of your character, so you have inserted yourself into not only the Sue, but the fanon characters.  KEEP YOURSELF OUT OF THE FIC, OKAY?!!

 

9.          Are your character’s friends based on your actual friends or the friends you’ve always wanted? (+1000)

 

See Question #3.

 

10.      Do any of these characters score above 5000 points if a major character or 1000 points if a minor character when run through this test? (+100)

            Bonus:   +200 if all of them do

 

Once again, no one likes a fic TEEMING with Mary Sues.  It’s like stumbling into a colony of leeches.

 

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